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Spiritual Discussion => Devotions & Poems => Topic started by: B on November 28, 2007, 02:28:30 AM

Title: Poetry Update
Post by: B on November 28, 2007, 02:28:30 AM
So, I decided to post updates of my latest poetry here when I write it. That way, it doesn't get lost and people that want to can easily find it (if such people exist. *grin*). :teeth:

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on November 28, 2007, 02:34:47 AM
Sitting on a Train Leaving Chicago at 5pm (http://brannon.kuahale.com/poetry.php?poem=17)

For those that don't venture into the Singles Discussion board or just didn't see them:

The Eye Haikus (http://brannon.kuahale.com/poetry.php?poem=18)

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on November 28, 2007, 02:56:46 AM
Uncapturable (http://brannon.kuahale.com/poetry.php?poem=19)

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: SippinTea on November 28, 2007, 04:49:08 AM
 :lurk:

:beret:
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: titushome on November 28, 2007, 02:59:12 PM
:popcorn:
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: titushome on November 28, 2007, 03:00:51 PM
Quote from: GlassDarkly on November 28, 2007, 02:34:47 AM
The Eye Haikus (http://brannon.kuahale.com/poetry.php?poem=18)

Reading all those together gives me the impression that you're a bit of a player.  ;)

Blue eyes, green eyes, brown eyes....
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on November 28, 2007, 07:19:44 PM
rofl! That's hilarious. I never thought of it sounding that way. haha!

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: SippinTea on November 28, 2007, 09:35:00 PM
That's what several other people thought, too. *grin*

The Nun knows these things. :P

:beret:
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: sunlight on November 30, 2007, 02:29:14 AM
i like your dolphin pictures... and your word pictures... (aka poems).
I'm always scared to post mine. There is always the possibility that people will read them the way i wrote them... and thats scary.

~ Chel

Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on December 04, 2007, 09:04:18 PM
Quote from: sunlight on November 30, 2007, 02:29:14 AM
i like your dolphin pictures... and your word pictures... (aka poems).

Thanks! *grin*

Quote from: sunlight on November 30, 2007, 02:29:14 AM
I'm always scared to post mine. There is always the possibility that people will read them the way i wrote them... and thats scary.

haha! I know the feeling. I have one or two that I still haven't shown many people. :teeth:

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: sunlight on December 06, 2007, 04:44:37 AM
I can understand that... and now that i have found a place to write without having to worry about people finding them... i find i write more, but share a whole lot less.
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: RainbowJingles on January 15, 2008, 08:27:38 PM
I still think the eyes have it, Brannon!  :-)
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on January 15, 2008, 09:24:18 PM
haha! I'm glad you like 'em. I've got a few ideas for some new poems. I need to find some time to work on them.

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 03:54:47 AM
Okay, this was not one of my ideas for a new poem. This was my attempt at writing one of those poems, and it turning into something completely different. lol This is brand new...prolly about 2 minutes old. I haven't even put it on my site, yet. Hope you like it. :teeth:


View From the Side of the Road

Shhhhhhhhooo! Shhhhhhhhaah!
Heated rubber spins, hungrily searching for its next bite of asphalt.
The road lies in surrender to the growling, metal beasts.
It gives tirelessly, yet never ceases to taunt with more.



©2008 Brannon Hall - All Rights Reserved
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: InChristGirl on February 05, 2008, 03:56:51 AM
Wow! that came out good. It kind of makes me sympathize with the road.
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 03:59:03 AM
haha! Thanks! :teeth: I think I would probably consider pretty much any poem a success that can move readers to sympathize with inanimate objects. *grin*

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: alohilani on February 05, 2008, 05:10:09 AM
Yep, I agree with ICG. I definitely feel sorry for the road and a little miffed at the vehicle.

It must be a hybrid. *grin*

:thumbsup2:
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 05:13:09 AM
lol Maybe... :teeth:

See, I'm a little bit surprised people are feeling sorry for the road. I think the last line makes it sound like it's toying with the cars. haha

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: alohilani on February 05, 2008, 05:14:26 AM
But it gives tirelessly, and it lays in surrender.

TIRE-lessly. Punny! *grin*

Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 05:17:04 AM
haha! You noticed. *grin* That one was intentional. :teeth:

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: alohilani on February 05, 2008, 05:19:23 AM
Yep! I notice stuff! :great:

(Especially shiny stuff... LOL!)
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 05:20:49 AM
rofl! I think there's a name for that... :eyebrow: ;)

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 06:00:15 AM
Amazingly, that poem started out as a poem about snow. :eyebrow: lol I'm not really sure what happened. *grin*

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Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: MelodyB on February 05, 2008, 06:42:00 AM
*lurk*
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: LeahMarie on February 05, 2008, 07:21:40 AM
:thumbsup2: :thumbsup2:
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 07:32:54 AM
:teeth:

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: sunlight on February 05, 2008, 04:45:38 PM
poor ST, i know she was wanting one about snow.. next time right? until that one turns into one about roadkill... REG
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 05, 2008, 06:51:19 PM
lol Yep! :teeth:

B
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: B on February 26, 2008, 04:15:53 AM
Once again, this is not one of my ideas for a new poem. Those are recorded on my SD card for future reference when I finally have some time to give them the attention they deserve. lol Anyways, here's the latest.


The Rose

I found a rose
A gentle treasure
Her petals closed
Soft and pure

I have a hope
To discover more
To see her open
Beautiful splendor



©2008 Brannon Hall - All Rights Reserved.
Title: Re: Poetry Update
Post by: sunlight on February 26, 2008, 04:18:44 AM
 :clap: